Song lyric feedback?

Never posted here. Never wrote a song. But life is getting heavy and therapy is expensive so I started writing ideas down. Tonight I just let my pen roll.

Not finished. Probably pretty cheesy and a little too concrete (I’m not very creative/abstract). Someone said “write TO someone” so I pictured my daughter.

Not looking to profit or perform. Just looking for ideas to improve my writing.

So, here goes nothin’…..

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Genre: Country

Untitled

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Verse ideas:

Alarm starts to shake but I’m already awake

It’s time to start the climb

Ignore my sore back, gotta keep life on track

But that anger fills my mind

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I’ve got a great life - two kids and a wife

So what’s with all this rage?

When I was a kid I just did what I did

And now, I feel trapped in a cage

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It’s not cuz of you, what I put myself through

It’s just how old men are

We take the weight of the Earth like I have since your birth

Without love, it wouldn’t be so hard

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Chorus ideas:

I wear my sweat on my sleeve

Cuz my heart’s taking leave

I may need some rest

but the weight on my chest

Sure makes it hard to breathe

OR

I wear my sweat on my sleeve

Cuz my heart needs to breathe

But it’s just my life’s fate

To take on the weight

So I just lift with my knees