Better way to write this cadence?

Im new to writing out cadences, i can crank them out all day by rote but by writing I’m inexperienced in good practices for “readability”

Is there a better way to write this concept out? Maybe different time signature. This is the rhythm I want and the foundation of this piece but just looking at it makes my brain hurt I can only imagine my students.

Im new to writing out cadences, i can crank them out all day by rote but by writing I’m inexperienced in good practices for “readability”

Is there a better way to write this concept out? Maybe different time signature. This is the rhythm I want and the foundation of this piece but just looking at it makes my brain hurt I can only imagine my students.